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This week's words;

Sunday - Instructions

Monday- Motorcycle

Tuesday- Wildflower

Wednesday- Asparagus

Thursday- Stopwatch

Friday - Confetti


Word of the Day
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16  ObjectWriting / Object Writing Word Of The Day / Pillow on: August 06, 2019, 05:51:00 PM
Soft plush wrapped around my neck, shaky cabin with recycled air vents and sounds of crying babies. I rest my chin forward, eyes half-moons the dim light dull white noise clouds float by like pillows, fluffy my throat's dry, saliva sucked up like I'm at the dentist with a tube between my teeth, sharp metal poking at my gums, smell of bubblegum and flouride, leaning slightly back in a torquoise seat, awkward my muscles tense until they open my mouth and talk about my day with me... flying back to lava rocks and sugar cane blowing--    
17  ObjectWriting / Object Writing Word Of The Day / Cigar on: August 05, 2019, 06:06:10 PM
Sitting in green plastic adirondack chairs, legs stretched out feet getting tickled by lanky grass we smoke in silence, long puffs interrupted by coqui frog calls and dumb remarks, revs of laughter. The cigar sits between my hands, warm against the skin I cough as I inhale too quickly. Low-lit ember is all I see of my friend's face, night shading the yard, my hoodie will smell of tobacco for days. Taste of french fries and salt water linger, earlier walking across hot lava rock to fresh water ponds, caves. The air through my nostrils burns as I breathe out the day, eyes heavy. 
18  ObjectWriting / Object Writing Word Of The Day / Horn on: July 31, 2019, 06:48:52 PM
I open the thick wooden door, music escapes outside, sound of scales in G flat and 16th note trumpet parts, glint of the horns off long sweep of incandescent light. Plaid shirt, a pretty face I look shyly towards the pianos. My hand holds the hickory sticks, chocolate milk burps and jabbing jokes but we are all business now, eyes focused on our teacher's hands. Taste of anticipation in the air, a slight prick of nerves I count us in, bringing back the dead through jazz standards. The air is dense, immediate, my mouth forces a calm breath and we're off.
19  ObjectWriting / Object Writing Word Of The Day / Light Bulb on: July 26, 2019, 07:29:54 PM
We wander through the dark city streets, eves and overhangs like caves and stalactites, stores shutting down, light bulbs flicker off leaving a hint of orange glow in their wake. Smell of all spice as we pass an herbal remedy store, display dim, cannabis leaves and bundled sage. Concrete curved, scuffed up curbs where the morning delivery van kiss its tires, tired man in a tan work shirt, already sweating before the sun even show its head. The taste of jasmine in the air mingles with sooty city burnt hints, like putting your face inside an old tire. I glance behind, echoes run and shadows drum my neck tingles, pulse quickens. Imaginations run wild late at night, breath of shoes scraping I turn and see a woman bent over her sleeping bag, eyes like hollow moons jangle of quarters I felt--     
20  ObjectWriting / Object Writing Word Of The Day / Re: Toaster on: July 26, 2019, 07:17:16 PM
Hidden lava orange beneath the chrome crust plugged and powered from the wall.

Cool line!
21  ObjectWriting / Object Writing Word Of The Day / Tijuana on: July 25, 2019, 08:24:24 PM
Hot dusty highway, the sky frowns as my eyes squint through the bright windshield glow. Breath smells of salsa and refried beans, sweating spicy jalepenos and greasy chicken, about as authentic as any Mexican food I've had. South of the border they may make it even better, down in a nondescript kitchen with wooden chairs, slow fans turning the heatwave in circles, fresh fumes of chopped cilantro and lemon, where chatter is full of rolled R's and J's that sound like L's. Tijuana, with rusty tin-roofed houses jimmy-rigged into low-hanging power lines for electricity, card board coverings, smell of rotting garbage, across town sit men in spotless white-- 
22  ObjectWriting / Object Writing Word Of The Day / Lavender on: July 23, 2019, 08:02:05 PM
I sit coloring, fingers firm skin constricted I grip the pencil, pigment skimming off like ink onto the smooth pulpy page, bark on bark in hues of magenta, aquamarine, lavender, charcoal. Dirty dishes sit piled up like a Jenga game, food stuck to plates, flies starting to hover, punch of tires outside breaks the lazy silence, a laughing voice in the distance. This town hunkers down for an early bedtime, stars spread out overhead. I taste the humid air and burp chardonnay, muscles at once tight and relaxed, hum of the fridge white noise as I fill in the page, feet tapping to some earworm melody. Sprig of flowers droops in a vase on the counter, lavender scent mixed with days old water and roses losing their petals. I need to get up suddenly, breathe--- 
23  ObjectWriting / Object Writing Word Of The Day / Toaster on: July 22, 2019, 06:14:55 PM
Bargain hunting in hole-in-the-wall thrift shops filled to the ceiling, smell of of moth balls and lemon-scented wood oil. Music plays trebly, piercing from the back of the room. Graveyard of electronics, wires flopping like dead fish, toaster with blackened edges, this thing is toast I think cleverly to myself. Toasters used to be my favorite cooking device, frosted blueberry pop tarts I'd tuck them into the slots and plunge the lever down, waiting, watching, steadying myself for the jack-in-the-box surprise pop! fingers burning hot hot hot as I flick the toasted morsels onto my plate. Molten filling, blue and white with sprinkles I salivate, dissolve on my tongue I feel my blood-sugar elevating like the ocean at high tide.
24  ObjectWriting / Object Writing Word Of The Day / Re: Wand on: July 20, 2019, 06:24:54 PM
Thanks! I liked your last line a lot:

Alone against the backdrop of a hill clutching the world while her grassy whiskers twirl and lift to the mottled mouth of heaven

good stuff
25  ObjectWriting / Object Writing Word Of The Day / T-shirt on: July 20, 2019, 06:18:53 PM
I sit in quiet comfort, air a perfect shade of cool my t-shirt floats over my skin. The stars poke through the night through smudgy windows, hot water kettle whistling in a crescendo, turn off the burner, blue and orange flame gives a quick flicker then vanishes like a magic act.  Slight odor of propane I mix my cocoa, powdery chocolate dust pillowy then submerged a little fleck jumps onto my white shirt, a sharp contrast, like a Jackson Pollock canvas. Hopefully warm water and laundry soap will wash it out. I raise my hand to take a sip, cry of pain! my lips reject the steaming liquid, steam fogging up the glasses should've been my first clue.  
26  ObjectWriting / Object Writing Word Of The Day / Wand on: July 19, 2019, 05:49:47 PM
The mud is heavy like quicksand suction sounds as her boots slurp out leaving dark deep prints. Her hands tremble slightly, gasps of air cutting through the quiet woods. Wands of lavender up on the hillside like a violet beacon. Hiking alone, swallowed by wilderness, scent of old musty dead soil, undisturbed her jacket feels confining, lungs hot with movement. The trees feel like old watching statues, cold and rusty with shedding skin. This is the place fairy tales are told about, bread crumbs and magic spells cast by withered old--
27  ObjectWriting / Object Writing Word Of The Day / Re: Leg on: July 19, 2019, 05:34:26 PM
Should I try to warm up and THEN start my timer?  Or, just, it is what it is kind of thing?

Totally up to you. Personally I see object writing as a nice warmup, a means to an end (great lyrics) with the addd benefit of sometimes you write something that you're really proud of.
28  ObjectWriting / Object Writing Word Of The Day / Re: Leg on: July 18, 2019, 07:31:43 PM
Hey, welcome to the forum! You're off to a great start here.

Honestly I find it hard to critique object writing, since it's main goal is for the writer to find their own gems and dive deep into the senses. So to that end it's a very personal/"objective" thing.

That being said, I think steering clear of so much commentary/thought processes (e.g. all the questions you ask in the first few lines) and sticking as closely as you can to the senses (what does the desk feel like? smell like? what do the tears taste like? Is your back arched or straight and are you slowly turning in a swivel chair or sitting motionless at a soft-lit desk? etc...)  will yield richer results for this particular exercise. I felt like you started really warming up towards the end with lines like:

"burnt and crisp, the straw snaps beneath my feet, cutting the soles and poking the arches"  Good stuff.

I'm also a songwriter and have found this to be a great tool to get the creative blood flowing. Hope you find that true too.
29  ObjectWriting / Object Writing Word Of The Day / Leg on: July 18, 2019, 07:10:52 PM
I walk. Slowly, steadily armpits rubbed raw from chafing rubber, hands locked on the handles. The hospital room smells disinfected, flavored with a faint fruity perfume the doctor tells me I'm making great progress, shows blown up pictures of my fractured leg, like drawn up plays for a football team she goes over the glowing x-rays. Summer heat weaves onto my skin as I hobble outside, sun blinding awkwardly I get into the car. I was told 3 more weeks of this plaster purgatory, of careful baths, stinky open cast my left foot sweating under its tight bonds, the pound of crutches on the creaky floorboards. the cast is scratchy as I run my nails over it, a sharp pur--     
30  ObjectWriting / Object Writing Word Of The Day / Re: Cotton Candy on: July 18, 2019, 06:58:53 PM
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