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This week's words;

Sunday - Instructions

Monday- Motorcycle

Tuesday- Wildflower

Wednesday- Asparagus

Thursday- Stopwatch

Friday - Confetti

Saturday-Homesick



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1  ObjectWriting / Object Writing Word Of The Day / balance beam on: June 11, 2019, 09:36:53 PM
with determination, chalky hands clap together releasing a sneeze worthy cloud of flour into the air, the gymnast steps through the haze, quads and glutes bulging like the green-hulk from years and years of lifting and flipping around the gymnasium, her coach always up her ass, she's well disciplined, her hands are still like lake water before the storm, the cheering fans that fill the room simmer down and until reaching a boil so soft you could hear a pin drop, i'm nervous, shaky, off-centered, on the edge of my seat, tapping my heal against the leg of my chair, tap tap tap tap, there's nothing left to chew of my nails and a pile of chipped pieces spatter the floor in front of me, 'kind of gross,' says the disgusted look on the face of the woman sitting to my right, dont care tho, this moment is too important, she can deal with the gags by removing herself from my presence...

2  ObjectWriting / Object Writing Word Of The Day / shmirfday card on: June 07, 2019, 08:03:24 PM
i drag my tongue across the envelope and seal it shut
careful not to split my taste buds
the flavor is dull but the contents are rich
a birthday card for my main bitch
she's been there since our college days
beside me walking to class through sunshine and rain
there when we'd feast, breakfast lunch and dinner
without her i'd be lost, with her i'm a winner
i write her name in the center of the front
my penmanship kinda sucks
but she knows what counts is on the inside
she makes even the ugliest of situations feel alright
see we both come from broken homes
some nights we'd throw pebbles at each other windows
crawl down the gutters and escape into the night
our friendship then was deep, but now its reaching new heights
i think I'm in love with my best friend
i would hate to tell her and see that end
so for now i'll give her this special card
with a riddle in it written from the bottom of my heart
baby steps go a long way in a delicate situation like this
but tomorrow night when she opens it, i might lean in for a kiss
her lips have always been a thing for me
in my head i fall for every word she speaks
happy...
3  ObjectWriting / Object Writing Word Of The Day / Re: Slinky on: June 05, 2019, 11:05:08 PM
gold!

Some gentle assistance
Not too much
No need for excessive force.




4  ObjectWriting / Object Writing Word Of The Day / Re: Slinky on: June 05, 2019, 10:01:09 PM
really nice!

highlights:

tinny and metallic clamoring that reminded me of some horror movie trailer scene. - interesting comparison!

The shag carpet stairs were dimly lit. - love this line for some reason!
5  ObjectWriting / Object Writing Word Of The Day / dank slank on: June 05, 2019, 09:54:06 PM
slinky, you wound-up metal centipede, crawling down the stairs, lookin like your legs are too long for you body, lanky and awkward when you move in that see-saw rhythm of yours, you play right on the beat while you descend down that carpet mountaintop, with it's sharp, steep, 90 degree cliffs, and over-extended lips, just waiting to stub my toes and send me tumbling down backwards. slinky, i was head-over-heels for you when i stretched your slender metal body out of my grandma's hand-sewn christmas stocking last year...
6  ObjectWriting / Object Writing Word Of The Day / Re: doomed balloon on: June 04, 2019, 08:52:23 PM
thanks dorian, glad you liked it!
7  ObjectWriting / Object Writing Word Of The Day / Re: Montana on: June 04, 2019, 07:32:14 PM
dreamy and soft - love it!
8  ObjectWriting / Object Writing Word Of The Day / Re: Balloon on: June 04, 2019, 07:31:02 PM
i dig this a lot, keep it up!
9  ObjectWriting / Object Writing Word Of The Day / montana on: June 04, 2019, 07:28:46 PM
montana, the forgotten state
on the US map its but a ghostly space

the grassy plains are vast
the stretched out highways go fast

once a frontier, a land unseen
til the pioneers blazed a trail through its middle seam

dirt huts and dusty rooftops
melt to mud with rain drops

shovel the pig shit in the yard fenced in
a tornado is a-comin with that country wind

mother wears an apron while she hangs clothes on the line
i watch naked and amused as they flap themselves dry

father rides a tractor in neat little rows
lays seed in the soil and nurtures their growth

brother and sister play 'round the house
i want in on that game of cat and mouse


10  ObjectWriting / Object Writing Word Of The Day / Re: Gas on: June 04, 2019, 02:38:37 AM
hi y'all,
 
everyone makes a good point here. i felt the need to chime in.

while this exercise has almost no rules, that's not to say that whatever rules/techniques you've already learned about effective writing and storytelling should be thrown out the window. this exercise can definitely sharpen your ability to write vividly, but overly vivid writing can be distracting and hard to relate to--which is where I think eloisenm is coming from. marksy, there's no doubt you are doing the exercise perfectly here--as pat would have it.

now, i can only speak for myself, but unless i am journaling (and im the only audience to be considered), i write assuming theres an audience out there to read or listen. whether youre storytelling, writing poetry, or songwriting, plot and audience should always be considered. the basic questions of who, when and where should be addressed. otherwise, it's just nonsense on paper--which can be cool and fun, but sort of useless at the same time.

i'd say that everything you know about storytelling and wordplay should be considered in any writing exercise you do. an exercise like this obviously puts the emphasis on sense-bound stuff--and that should come first, but if you got that part down, it's time to mix the other elements into to the pot. it's time to start writing with purpose.

when i first started object writing, it was all random phrases and words, and i was thrilled with that because i was at least saying 'something.' object-writing helped me to stay focused at a time in my writing where i was completely directionless. as i did more of it, the storyteller in my head started speaking up--and stories started to emerge out of nothing. That was THE magic moment for me--and after reading all of Pat's books on lyric writing, I truly believe that was his intent for us with an exercise like this. to bring out the vivid story-teller--the RELATABLE storyteller. object writing is a crucial piece to this, but it's certainly not the end-all be-all. as in, the skill of sense-bound writing means nothing if it can't be applied effectively. again, this exercise doesn't require it to make sense--but that doesn't mean you shouldn't strive for it to.

i would recommend to anyone who feels like they've got the sense-bound stuff under control, to start applying it to whichever writing-form they want to get better at--whether that be lyrics, poems, short-story, blogging ect.. this is THE FORUM to share it and get feedback.

good stuff,

john
11  ObjectWriting / Object Writing Word Of The Day / doomed balloon on: June 03, 2019, 06:29:12 PM
my balloon is sinking like a rock
once full of helium, now out of breath
i used to look up at you floating through the clouds
but now you mope along at my feet, my eyes to the ground
poor balloon, once rich with excitement
i love you so much, but it seems you dont like me
won't you lift my spirits high again
i dont think i can handle another loss of a friend
youre skin wrinkles as you continue to age
life went much smoother in your younger days
i blew you up so big and bright
but now you're old and faded and sucking the life from me
its time to end your misery---
pffff

12  ObjectWriting / Object Writing Word Of The Day / canvas on: April 26, 2019, 07:44:34 PM
her still body is a blank canvas
laying there on the bed
with hair falling down her face
silently sleeping
chest rising and sinking
somewhere safe in dreamland
i thought, 'how lucky am i?'
to have someone so pure
untouched and untainted by the darker shades of life
still innocent
forever optimistic
painting her world using every color of the rainbow
her brush is her own
just look how she's grown
like a flower
her will could cut stone
for nothing will stop her
no matter how grey the sky
no matter how bare the winter trees...
13  ObjectWriting / Object Writing Word Of The Day / mustache on: April 22, 2019, 08:23:53 PM
it stretched across his face like giant furry caterpillar, snoozing in the space just above his lips and below his nose, which hangs long and low now in his old age, the skin on his face is delicate, almost translucent, wrinkled and spotted from decades of sun exposure while he worked his flower gardens, he thinks long and hard while his jaw quivers trying to sound out a sentence, but his memory wont allow it, his eyes are telling as his family huddles around patiently for a sign of his old-self, i think about what age will do me, if i'll walk this stony earth as long as his tired-feet allowed him to, will i stand half the man or twice the man as he? it's like trying to swim through concrete imaging that i'll even come close to the accomplished life that he lived, a world war two vet, once standing tall in uniform, brave, buff, full of energy, sailing the blue pacific looking for wrecked aircraft and pulling men out of the water in the black of night, settling down with a beautiful wife, cocooning their love, giving life to six beautiful children, five rowdy sons and a tom-boy daughter, now he sits, hunched over in a wheelchair, not knowing where he is..
14  ObjectWriting / Object Writing Word Of The Day / hose on: April 19, 2019, 09:21:52 PM
the sun is steaming on this hot summer day,
i'll slip into my trunks before i make my way,
down to the pebble shoreline of minnehonk lake,

i'll touch my toes into the surface
like the little thermometers they are,
to decide if a swim would be worth it

the lawn to my back smells fresh cut,
a sprinkler system chirps somewhere in the yard,
schools out for the summer,
no more desks to anchor me now
im as free as a bird, there's no bringing me down

i'll take a running start and then off the dock i'll dive
head first into my sweet sixteen prime
15  ObjectWriting / Object Writing Word Of The Day / card on: March 26, 2019, 07:27:26 PM
i hide behind jack shit, sitting at this round table filled with snakes looking to steal my hard earned dough, i keep my cool though, expressionless and calm, yet confident as to not blow my cover, i raise the table a buck and throw the little black chip into the center, their eyes watch me like hawks, waiting and lurking for any indication that i might be bluffing, i stare back with a glance that could cut like a knife, they look at their hands, pondering the possibilities, nervously tapping their foot, unseen under the table, knawing at the inside of their bottom lips, squinting and rechecking the cards laid out before them, puffy clouds of tobacco billow from their lips, the atmosphere is hazy, dim lit, i reach out slowly to my neat glass of whiskey, throwing back what remains of it, straight-faced I swallow, not even flinching as it sears my throat on the way down, aged-scotch, nothing like it, the kind your grandaddy likes to keep locked away, only to be seen on special occasion or when mourning...
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