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This week's words;

Sunday - Instructions

Monday- Motorcycle

Tuesday- Wildflower

Wednesday- Asparagus

Thursday- Stopwatch

Friday - Confetti

Saturday-Homesick



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1  ObjectWriting / Object Writing Word Of The Day / Ballerina on: April 20, 2019, 10:21:06 PM
Her athletic frame pivots on a single leg bearing her weight down on one hardened foot, toes pointed while the equilibrium of her practiced twist sends the burden outwards. As she turns the dedicated lighting catches sequins like delicate stars upon her costume, flashing iridescent and bold. She exits the spin half kneeling, the agony in her arched pose mimics the music, the combined effect tearing your soul as you watch her. The tears of her pain fall from her limbs as a hero, pauper or prince waltzes like a swan through water to her side, lifting her upwards. A spree of coughs from a nearby patron interrupts your reveries and like a chorus the crowd shoots daggers at the culprit accusing the guilty of intentionally disturbing the swelling flurry of emotion that had, until the indelicate bluster of coughs, been consuming the crowd. The woman who had offered her lungs and sat dabbing her mouth of the spittle that accompanied them seemed unaffected by the cruel stares. The ballet had moved on, costumes had changed...
2  ObjectWriting / Object Writing Word Of The Day / Re: post it note on: April 19, 2019, 10:42:07 PM
This was definitely a hard prompt! You've done a great job with creating this idea of a lackluster attitude of being at work. I feel like everything this person did in this scene was half-hearted and mostly from routine than deliberate intention. The most energy is given to the excitement of using a black sharpie and catching the smell.

If it helps, I use difficult topics to just going slow and hunker down on the sense-bound language which helps me be more descriptive in other more interesting topics. Sometimes the difficult stuff just falls flat and it's really disappointing afterwards haha. I will then pick a topic I like and do a 5 minute or 90 second to boost my self-esteem again!

Good work fireystarter
3  ObjectWriting / Object Writing Word Of The Day / Re: Hose on: April 19, 2019, 10:27:56 PM
Thanks greynights! I really loved comparing the wave of a sprinkler to a peacocks immense plumage. It was really fun the write this one
4  ObjectWriting / Object Writing Word Of The Day / Bottle on: April 19, 2019, 10:21:29 PM
I woke to the sound of my dog grumbling and haruffing, the darkness telling me it was past midnight. Drugged by sleep I clambered out of bed, my mind like Tinkerbell's holding only one thought at a time. My body was rigid with annoyance, my heart racing to catch up with my flustered intentions. I found Molly curled up on the black and red floral print arm chair, not even bothering to rise and face the challenge of whatever she was grumbling at. 1 foot nothing and a complete bossy boots, she was head of security in this household. Before I could move her I heard the voices of men talking outside. I felt their words like they were standing over my shoulder and I slunk to the windows where the curtains had been pulled shut. At the edge I shifted the curtains slightly, enough to let a single eye take in the scene. For a moment it was fruitless, the sleep blind eyes and the dark cloudy night offering no contrast or colour blending the world almost like fog. The sound of glass bottles shattering on bitumen...
5  ObjectWriting / Object Writing Word Of The Day / Hose on: April 18, 2019, 10:30:58 PM
The sweat beats down on our brows, seeping further under our skin, turning our bodies to puddles that sink deeper into the couch. The brutal sun bullies us into submission, robbing us of our youthful energy. In the house we can hear Dad toiling way, somehow immune to the oppressive heat. You can feel the crickets on your ears like a bad case of tinnitus. Through the couch you can hear the crunch of dead grass and almost choke on the dirt surely making its way inside. On the grass the hose sits like an uncoiled snake, running a trench through the forsaken landscape. You can hear the feeble attempt of the sprinkler spitting water lamely, searching for green grass. Dad comes up the stairs accompanied by a crescendo of steps and a rattle from the zip on his heavy boots: "Get your togs. I've set the hose up". Like sleeping dogs enticed with food we jump up, springing to our rooms with pushes and shoves. The togs themselves are a relief, allowing the sweat covering our bodies to catch a breeze from the fans. Running outside we see the peacock wave of the sprinkler swinging back and forth, glittering like crystals in the sunlight, singing like sirens. Laughing we leap forth, splashing through the water's feathers disrupting its beauty. The sun smiles on...
6  ObjectWriting / Object Writing Word Of The Day / Re: Post-it Note on: April 18, 2019, 10:25:19 PM
Thanks fireystarter! It's really great to get this feedback and to know it has inspired you. I find it difficult to know whether I've hit the mark sometimes and it feels like we're always second guessing ourselves so this is great!
7  ObjectWriting / Object Writing Word Of The Day / Re: Bologna on: April 17, 2019, 10:30:43 PM
the narrow laneway style streets embroidered with strikingly high and lengthy buildings closer together than I feel they should be.

What a fantastic line. The buildings are embroidered into the narrow laneways of the city. It makes it all feel so organic and part of one whole. Great line!
8  ObjectWriting / Object Writing Word Of The Day / Re: Garage on: April 17, 2019, 10:24:32 PM
Thanks all! I really appreciate the comments.
9  ObjectWriting / Object Writing Word Of The Day / Re: Mouse on: April 17, 2019, 10:22:51 PM
Hey marksy, I'm always for sharing ideas! If you wanted to play with the ideas, it could be cool to follow the coffee down the drains and into your blood stream rather than having them fill up. You could expand on the depth and strength of the beans, what it smells like, what it reminds you of, how it makes you feel etc. You could even talk about how ineffective your body is before the caffeine hits, is it slow and languid? heavy? rough around the edges?

None of this was what I thought on first reading it. I've just gone through it again and thought these ideas would be fun to explore.
10  ObjectWriting / Object Writing Word Of The Day / Re: Garage on: April 17, 2019, 10:11:02 PM
This was a fantastic read! I thorough enjoyed your descriptions - the fat man at a buffet, static on the TV, atrophied workbench. The light talking to the room was awesome. The emphasis on the doll was amazing too.

Great stuff!
11  ObjectWriting / Object Writing Word Of The Day / Post-it Note on: April 17, 2019, 10:07:14 PM
I watch as they cross the threshold into the cavernous shed filled wall-to-wall with stationary. An organisers paradise. Parents, armed with a supplies list watermarked with their schools name. It's the week before school and you can see it in their frantic eyes, straining with the cost of everything on the list and the desperation to have their days returned to them. Their children vary, some are polite and well behaved, moving behind their mothers like maids-in-waiting. You can almost hear their requests "Mother, might I go play with the pends, if it pleases thee?" while their mother, surprisingly modern spurts "I don't want to be here any longer than we have to. If you want to do something help me find the items on this list". Unsurprisingly the children do, grateful for some freedom. Other children roam the store like tiny dinosaurs, climbing shelves, grasping products and discarding them on the floor, screaming wildly as they careen down aisles, bashing all the keys on the keyboards. Their parents look particularly disheveled well practiced in ignoring the wild behaviour while staff stalk them through the store, personally affronted and desperate for revenge. One stops another and signals putting his foot out in front of a child...



I probably got too wrapped up in the story on this one and could have been more descriptive throughout. Still fun though!
12  ObjectWriting / Object Writing Word Of The Day / Re: Bologna on: April 16, 2019, 10:15:20 PM
Haha, you gotta do, what you gotta do! I'm glad I didn't look up Bologna before I wrote. I wouldn't have known where to start and probably would have ended up at Paella.

Thanks for the comments. I really enjoyed putting Rudolph red noses into the story!
13  ObjectWriting / Object Writing Word Of The Day / Re: Mouse on: April 16, 2019, 10:00:41 PM
Now I have the urge to hold a beautiful soft mouse.   Cheesy
14  ObjectWriting / Object Writing Word Of The Day / Re: Mouse on: April 16, 2019, 09:57:19 PM
Awesome language in here. It really feels like a painful morning waiting for the caffeine to kick in followed by desperate attachment to the caffeine.
15  ObjectWriting / Object Writing Word Of The Day / Garage on: April 16, 2019, 09:52:35 PM
5 A.M. and the dawn has not yet broken.  I hear the sounds of a house starting up, audible yawns, bowls and plates clinking as they're removed from drawers, the beep of the microwave. I hear footsteps approaching, dampened by the thick floral carpet. ""Come on. Wake up! We're leaving in 30" calls Mum. Normally an early morning would be born with heavy eyes and disdain, a grumbling body moving as slowly as possible hoping the rehearsal or training was cancelled. This morning is the start of Easter and that means a five hour drive to Glen Innes for a week of smokey campfires, bush walks, board games, reading and unabashed exploration beyond the old, unused train tracks. I rally my limbs and clamber out of bed. Dressing, I recount the final items I need to pack: a toothbrush, ugg boots, pillow, my freshly covered doona and my big jacket. Arms laden I amble downstairs while my jaw cracks a yawn. "Morning" mumbles my sister, "Toast?". I nod a reply. Early mornings are for single word questions and visual communication only. Well trained teenagers, we hop outside, ready to lend hands to packing the trailer. Dad's already begun, stacking and...
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