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This week's words;

Sunday - Instructions

Monday- Motorcycle

Tuesday- Wildflower

Wednesday- Asparagus

Thursday- Stopwatch

Friday - Confetti


Word of the Day
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 on: July 13, 2018, 09:36:46 AM 
Started by JohnnyV - Last post by peekschris
cool.  I like the numbers thing you did.

 on: July 13, 2018, 09:35:29 AM 
Started by berkley84 - Last post by peekschris
Seemed a little long, but I have no attention span.

"Muted groans and microphones
The band gets applause & the comic stones
You are grinning
While the crowd is thinning
The whiskey's close and the future's far
My dreams in a parasitic bar"

I really liked this part, but I agree with M about the word "parasitic"

I might have changed "applause" to cheers, but that was just my gut instinct.  I like your stuff. I'd like to hear this one set to music.

 on: July 13, 2018, 09:29:22 AM 
Started by katia1602 - Last post by peekschris
nice poem. I had to re-read the last stanza. My mind couldn't figure out who the character was. Those are helpful comments. Kudos to both of you!

 on: July 13, 2018, 09:25:58 AM 
Started by shea16 - Last post by peekschris
not bad  Smiley good imagery and concept.  some parts were a little wordy or unnecessary in my opinion (I would have edited the "geyser" part. But I think I got the overall point and feeling. Good job  Smiley

 on: July 13, 2018, 09:16:02 AM 
Started by Lowwraine13 - Last post by peekschris
clever  Wink

 on: July 13, 2018, 06:01:23 AM 
Started by Lowwraine13 - Last post by Lowwraine13
Thank you!

 on: July 13, 2018, 05:59:07 AM 
Started by Lowwraine13 - Last post by Lowwraine13
         It was damn near a scene out of the "Top 10 Best Places To Treat a Woman". They had candle light on petite tablecloth draped tables. The boats were crawling slowly up and down the river  as they made they're way through downtown. We had front row seats to it all as we made our way through a gracious evening. The dinner was a delight. I however needed a glass of milk with my steak. I was given a glass of milk and through the constant motion of hands I used when telling her some odd story, I accidentally spilled my milk. I say "ahhh shit" and proceed to pat it up, its dripping down the side of the table cloth. I finally look up at her and I notice the pigment of the black that was once highlighting her eyes is running down her cheeks. Her mascara is running. I ask her hastily, "what's wrong?". She just points at the spilled milk.

 on: July 12, 2018, 03:45:20 PM 
Started by oohl90 - Last post by oohl90
7/12/2018 - Spy

Twangy guitars reverberate through my black and white mind. Ominous missed calls from an unknown number turn me into a spy, searching for answers with minimal clues. No voice messages, no way to know who, or why? A quick google search reveals no other leads. Slippery suspicions dare me to hit the green call button but an anxious pit in the depth of my stomach restrains my quick fire thumb. Keep it cool and go about your day, but then the familiar jingle of my ringtone pierces the air. A second call, it must be important. My mouth’s ripe with salutations and my mind’s placing bets. “Hello?” I answer in a cautiously calm manner. Choking on the bitter static, no response. “Hello?” I growl again.

 on: July 12, 2018, 06:04:52 AM 
Started by Lowwraine13 - Last post by peekschris
I dig  Smiley

 on: July 12, 2018, 06:03:46 AM 
Started by berkley84 - Last post by peekschris
I second that.

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