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Diego
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« on: August 15, 2016, 02:34:40 AM »

Hi there,

Here's the track https://soundcloud.com/diego_galvao/i-gonna-find-1

and the lyrics:

I remember the day trying looking at myself
Tearing off my skin searching for something real

Screaming to the clouds don't let me drown here
Is that the way it should be?

The uncovered truth feels just like confusion to me
Always rushing love towards nobody nowhere

I'm just addicted to the wine of this world
I just can't help I keep trying

I gonna find u some day
I gonna find the way
In the middle of my dream
Or in the end of the day

I can hear u calling my name
Trying to overcome fear leaving the past alone
Waves come toward me in my dreams
They seem to hear me

I never want to feel the way I feel today
Only in silence I can be true

I gonna find u some day
I gonna find the way
In the middle of my dream
Or in the end of the day

Feedback and criticism are more than wanted.

Thanks

Diego
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« Reply #1 on: August 15, 2016, 06:02:25 AM »

Used the little blue earth button to make this link.
https://soundcloud.com/diego_galvao/i-gonna-find-1


There is inevitability in the cord structure so maybe you should add something about what happens when the finding happens. Nice mixing!
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« Reply #2 on: August 15, 2016, 07:27:32 AM »

Hi Chris,

Would u mind to explain little more about "inevitability in the chord structure"? I' don't get what u mean. Is the song predictable?

I deliberated made this song without a resolution, which is how I was feeling in the moment I wrote.
Maybe I may be trying to express musically and lyrically something too complex for my current level?
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« Reply #3 on: August 15, 2016, 09:23:43 AM »

I mean they are confident about where they are going. Maybe the contrast with the dreamier parts is the main thing though.
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« Reply #4 on: August 15, 2016, 09:10:11 PM »

I mean they are confident about where they are going. Maybe the contrast with the dreamier parts is the main thing though.

Ow I see...

Thanks for ur input and thanks for listening!

Peace.
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« Reply #5 on: August 26, 2016, 05:08:20 AM »

My friend had a listen after it popped up on Soundcloud after Furefly. He likes the mixing to. He thought I should pull back the harp.
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