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HeartAttack&Vine
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« on: June 14, 2017, 03:51:01 PM »

Digits click, feet drum on the down beat as he sways in my train seat. Unaware his backpack presses hard against my side.  squashing hip, stomach, left breast. ugh. 12 stops. counting backwards  between musty oversoaked mens clothes, cheap perfume, Wriggleys, giggling schoolgirls, whingeing toddlers and distorted earphones. 10. we shake and shuffle as one East-bound. almost one crazy family at Christmas dinner. 8. breathe deep, shuffle up. hot coffee, denim,  click-clack briefcase lids, fresh shampoo. Ah but my mind melts to a mess of crashing cymbals as we rattle past St. Andrews street. I scan each driveway for his raven Ford. frozen breath. wide-eyed. standing guard against tears that defeat me. I zero in on the dime shuffle coming from my neighbours palm. Dollars and dimes jangle a tune that sing me back from hell. It hits me then, how I am the loose change from loves lost years. just loose like skin with no bone, adrift, finding warmth in the palm of a strangers rhythm barrelling to the city's edge. chink-skish-m-jangle-sksh-sksh-badoosh-chink.

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« Reply #1 on: June 15, 2017, 12:48:11 AM »

like the " I am the loose change from loves lost years." metaphor
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« Reply #2 on: June 15, 2017, 01:59:14 AM »

Oh thank you for reading it Paul! I have not written on this site for over a year. I usually handwrite in a journal but it's great to type again and access a different writing voice via this medium.  Cheesy
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« Reply #3 on: June 15, 2017, 08:02:03 AM »

Great Stuff!
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