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This week's words;

Sunday - Instructions

Monday- Motorcycle

Tuesday- Wildflower

Wednesday- Asparagus

Thursday- Stopwatch

Friday - Confetti

Saturday-Homesick



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« on: November 06, 2011, 07:39:08 PM »
Merit
Tastes like discipline
Feels like a badge of honor pinned to your lapel
Sounds stern and unyielding
Looks like a Roman legion of 10,000+ marching in the desert to an enemy destination
Smells like witch hazel
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« Reply #1 on: January 30, 2012, 10:08:12 PM »
Hello...I like what you have written here. I'm new to this site and quite excited about it. I haven't written for a while since I studied Lyric Writing online through Berklee last year but I do recall when you use the word 'like' it changes a metaphor into a simile. If you change what you have written by removing 'like' I think you may uncover very strong metaphors.
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